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It's a start. A good one at that.

Well, this is about 9812396283x better than all the other "first stick animations" we have flooding the portal. What i mean to say is, you have lots of potential. Unlike some of those other guys, who will never animate anything worth watching in their lives (probably, at least), i can see that you will be a pretty good animator. And if you work for it, it can happen very soon.

There's a few problems with it, here they are:
you filterFagged this flash. The shitty computer i'm using right now couldn't view it. To watch the flash, i had to download it, watch it several times (lol), then delete it. Unlike me, many people will not know how to download flash from newgrounds, so many people won't see your work, and end up voting 0.

Preloaders are important. I'm on a 7mbits down connection, so i rarely have to worry about this. But all those low broadband and dial-up users are gonna get pissy. Another thing that might get you an undeserved zero.

Your use of vcam wasn't too bad, although it was going a little crazy at the end for no reason, haha. I'm gonna guess that you put it in a movie clip?

The biggest problem is right here: WAYYYY TOO FAST. Lower the fps by, say... 5 numbers? This was ridiculous, i could barely see what was going on. And especially with the vcam moving around. It was impossible. Like i said, though, i downloaded the flash, so i simply zoomed out a bit, and i could see the battle. But seriously, you have to slow down your next flash. If you feel too lazy to do more frames, just lower the fps. Obviously your animation will be more choppy, but hey, that's how it works.

Now, you have the foundation of a good stick animator. You need some good tutoring. With the help of others, you can work on:
-Easing*
-Fluidity
-Properly Choreographed battles
-Physics*
-Proper use of sound
-Great Backgrounds
-Proper Animating Procedure

Now, i'm not saying that you don't already have any of these. I'm just saying, that's what people can help you achieve. The stars indicate the most important (in my opinion, anyway) skills out of them all.
Newgrounds isn't a very good place for an aspiring stick animator. You won't quite get proper criticism like this very often. I suggest you migrate to a stick-site. It will be much more enjoyable for you.
Some good ones being:
-SFDT (stick figure death theatre)
-Shiftlimits (i got banned from there, pfft. The people there are a little rough on newcomers, and they are basically the embodiments of sarcasm. First impressions are everything. once you get in, these guys will help you out LOTS. My stay there nearly tripled my animation skill)
-Stickpage
These among others will help you achieve a higher level of animating.

PM me if you want to talk some time.
-Cheers, Zedd56

DeremixProductions responds:

Wel i thank you for your opinion but this is my first and only flash stick fight i ussually do pivot randoms here's some of my better work http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HgLiEe W4C84

Why?

Why are you shitting yourself over one review that was like 5 words long?

Anyway, here it is broken down.

The joke at the end wasn't really funny. It was kinda lame.

What most people do is play with flash for a few weeks before making their first submission. You obviously didn't want to wait and submitted something absolutely experienceless. There was no sign of easing, fluidity, it was just bad.

Length - A very important factor. This was, what, 10 seconds long? Effort is a necessity if you want to get anywhere here.

The combined forces of no length + crappy animation means that many people will mistake this for spam. And honestly, i don't care what you say, this is in the portal about the same time as your other stick video, and you only did it in one hour... yeah, this is spam.

Nobody likes spam, you're gonna have to spend a little more time on your animations. And i don't think you should submit anything until you have a month's practice with the program.

Anyways, that about sums it up. Sorry it had to be like that, but you aren't contributing to this wonderful asset we call newgrounds. Rather, defacing it.

dannydoomno1 responds:

i hav taken all your shitty remarcs and pittiful sorrys in and i think you are right

ROOOOOOOFLLLL

Good Joke
Animation needed work ><

HI IT'S ME.
text also stayed for a bit too long
GOOD DAY SIR

hey ace, what's going on :>

Pretty epic. Lol 109 reviews?
You're at 312, and as long as this is on the front page, that'll just keep on rising...

This was really good. But usually when i review something, i note the flaws, not to be an asshole, but so those same flaws don't continue. Oh yeah, that's called constructive criticism.

So here it is: the thing i noticed right away that really took away from the epicness of your main character was the wobblyness. You know, like when you redraw a stick, but not in the exact place you wanted it to be, and then when you play it, it's like... vibrating(?) or something.

Secondly, i personally didn't like the eyes you put on your main. It made him look kinda silly whereas his fighting make him look like more of a silent serious epic. That's just an opinion thing, though. Oh, and it's not a negative, either. Adds style :>

I'd like to add that your smoke effects were amazing. Blur was used often but not overused so that it started looking strange to the eyes. And glow was used in the right places, too.

Good job :>

please don't...

...animate stick figures ever again.

The assumption song was pretty win
but this was a complete failure.
an ultraflop, if you will.

By recycling the old icon, you make yourself look like an imposter.
I could easily see that there was like 100x more effort in the first one.
They aren't even related, what the fuck.

Seriously, dude. Even if you made a second that was GOOD, i would be pissed. You don't make a sequel to something like that :/

Anyways, better luck next time.
Oh, and i am SERIOUS. DON'T animate sticks. You are much better off with fb's. The completely horrible physics in this flash made it completely boring to watch. Made me angry, even.

If it wasn't for the length, this would get blammed.

SoraGuy responds:

This is just a joke.

Congratulations.

You are one of the very few people who's first flashes didn't make me want to strangle them. I see effort in this, and potential. Keep it up.

kai, few things.

First of all, i'd just like to say, that you completely contradicted yourself. If you wanted to spread this message, you would have done better to post it on your userpage, or something. Or at least by putting a little more effort into this flash, at least that way you wouldn't be defeating the purpose.

I find it funny that everybody else who reviewed were saying: "Yeah, man, that's a really good point. People should stop submitting crap."

Okay, well, for one thing, everybody already knows that. It's common knowledge. That's like you walking up to a tree, kicking it, and screaming HEY! DID YOU KNOW YOU WERE A TREE?
Stating the obvious. Pointless.
And secondly, this flash is part of that.

Sorry to sound mean, i don't intend to. Just saying. You are simply adding to the crap and spam.
Anyways, two stars for good intention, another star for the 'effort' you put into this.

straberrykiler6789 responds:

im probably not making any more of these movies any way

I HAF MAED THIS SEXINESS TOO

AND I LUV U GUISE
<3

"worth the wait?"

but it wasn't.
Even more so since you said it was.
Let's see, here:

Your spelling is shit.
The effects; they were shit.
The jokes; They were not funny.
You spelled goku's real name wrong (i do not spell it here in fear of misspelling it myself. I know how it is pronounced, but not how it is spelled).
The parts where you were obviously trying to be serious didn't seem serious because of the music that didn't fit the flash at all, and the crappy dialogue.

Yeah, you slid by quite luckily with that two, my friend.

wjimmyw responds:

hahaha wow your an even better comedian than me, you say you dont think the jokes are funny when you dont get them yourself, karrot...kakarot and then he procedes to say "i thought id have lunch and carrots are sounding good" which was a play on the word karrot, so i couldnt have made that joke with-out perposly misspelling kakarot.and that was the only joke i made therfore you couldnt not find the jokes funny while you do not understand them

devinsimmons92's comment...

...was indeed a fact. In this case, at least.

Gokuslilbrother responds:

Sorry to say this but,
this is a 4 star flash bruh

I Animate sticks. I'm very active on the flash forum. I wish i could speak japanese, and I like anime/manga. I am also a Actionscripter. I've been told by many on the forums that i am very helpful. I'm friendly, and love to help people out :> FWENDS?

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